Script final draft

1. INT. TRAIN CARRIAGE. DAY.

Seventeen-year-old ALICE is sitting in the window seat of train by herself. She is looking out of the window in deep thought and scrunching MARK'S hooded sweatshirt between her fingers.

ALICE

(Voiceover)

I honestly thought that when I left home it would be a happy affair, a crowd of family to see me off, a loving boyfriend to load my bags into the trunk. I imagined myself going off to University, my whole life in front of me. But I suppose everyone wants to believe things will turn out the way they're meant to. The movie ending way, I thought me life would turn out like that too. I was a good student, part of a close-knit family, a big group of friends; I even had a cliché of a high school boyfriend. However this all changed the day I decided to step off the face of the earth.

TITLES: TRAIN JOURNEY

The words ripple away to the surface of a pond.

2. EXT. POND. NIGHT.

A surface of a pond with the water disturbed before we see Alice break the surface. ALICE floats on the surface of the water.

MARK

Alice!

ALICE stirs on top of the water

MARK

(Annoyed)

Alice where are you?

MARK emerges from the clearing. ALICE swims towards the edge as MARK walks up the pond platform.

MARK

Jesus Christ Alice.

MARK helps ALICE out of the pond and wraps his jumper round her shoulders.

ALICE

(Meekly)

Thanks.

MARK walks away. ALICE picks up her bags and follows.

3. INT: TRAIN. DAY

ALICE sits on the seat and pulls MARK's hoody round her. She's upset.

ALICE

(Voiceover)

Mark gave up on me.

4. EXT. HAMPSTEAD HEATH. NIGHT.

ALICE and MARK walk out of a dark enclosed area into an open space. ALICE turns round to face him.

MARK

(Impatient)

Look Alice I don't know. (Pause) What do you want from me?

ALICE

To care! (Pause) About me.

MARK

(Half arsed)

I do. Look alice I'm 18, I wanna go out and enjoy myself. I don't wanna be dealing with this stuff.

ALICE look even more upset and begins to talk, when MARK interrupts her.

Don't get me wrong I knew you had issues when I met you, and that's why I asked you out, coz I felt sorry for you and you looked really hot at Chris's Halloween party. But lately your so withdrawn and upset all the time, it's like your different. This is different I can't be dealing with.

ALICE

You mean you can't be dealing with me?

ALICE stares blankly at him waiting for a response.

MARK

I like you and everything but I can't help you. You need to sort stuff out, like whatever's going on at home. Look Alice.

MARK reaches out for her. ALICE pulls away sharply.

Lemme walk you to the bus stop and we can talk some more.

ALICE

(Defiant)

I can walk myself.

ALICE turns and walks away from him.

MARK

(Calling out)

Please don't be like this.

ALICE turns sharply back around.

ALICE

(Angry)

You've made yourself perfectly clear. Mark. (Pause) Oh yeah and I'm keeping your jumper.

5. INT: HOME. NIGHT.

ALICE walks in. There's a loud muffled argument coming from the kitchen. ALICE closes the door and turns to lean against it and begins to cry.

6. INT: BEDROOM. DAY.

ALICE is lying on the bed, stroking her cat.

ALICE

(Voiceover)

I couldn't get last night out of my head, I felt like a part of me was still lost under the surface. (Pause) In the days that followed Mark took no time in moving on...and I began to realize jus how imperfect the surface of my life was.

ALICE enters the kitchen. MUM is slouched over the kitchen table with a bottle of wine. ALICE knocks it over. ALICE leaves before a slamming of a door is heard.

7. EXT. OUTSIDE FRONT DOOR STEP. DAY.

ALICE is sitting on the steps as MUM opens the door in a dressing gown, looking dishevelled, with the bottle of wine as if to put it in the recycling. But is startled by ALICE'S unexpected presence.

MUM

What you doing out here love? What will the neighbours think?

Goes to touch ALICE'S shoulder but she brushes it off. ALICE is clearly annoyed but acts flippant.

ALICE

Oh I'm sorry do we care what the neighbours think now (pause, MUM mumbles the start of a sentence) coz last time I checked we didn't care what the neighbours thought when you wanted to come home at 4oclock, trollied. Or how about the time, the social services came over and you screamed your head off at the neighbours accusing them of calling them?

MUM

Look Alice it's not been easy for me, you wouldn't understand, where I'm coming from.

ALICE

I know where your coming from, that bottle of merlot in your right hand! (pause) Third one this week isn't it?

MUM

You have no idea what I've been through, the loss I've endured.

ALICE

(Hysterical)

No you can't imagine! And you don't even want to!

MUM

What does that mean?

ALICE

There were two people in that car mum, me and dad! (Pause) Sorry he's the only one you cared whether lived or died.

ALICE pushes past her indoors. MUM looks dismayed and upset before throwing the bottle angrily into the recycling bin.

8. INT. TRAIN STATION. DAY.

ALICE is sitting on a bench.

ALICE

(Voiceover)

I knew I wanted to be free, to feel the weight of it all leave my body, even if that meant descending into the unknown.

ALICE walks up to the ticket booth and buys a ticket.

ALICE

Thank you.

ALICE walks away from the booth into the foyer and walks past a convenience store. She takes out her purse with the ticket in her other hand. She looks uncertain.

ALICE

(Voiceover)

Things had to change.

9. INT. CAFE. DAY.

ALICE is sitting in a booth of café, by the window but not looking out of the window. There is a JOURNALIST interviewing her sitting in the seat opposite her. The JOURNALIST is smartly dressed and has a note pad and Dictaphone on table in front of her. ALICE is smiling and dressed in a white shirt with her hair tied back.

INTERVIEWER

How did you know that would be the right time?

ALICE

Well I'd just finished my A-Levels and I was all set to go to a University, in central London, and… I jus knew that if I stayed at home for those three years that it was just going to get worse and I was never going to leave.

INTERVIEWER

How do you mean going to get worse?

ALICE

It was like I was in a glass jar watching my life get worse and worse and all I could do was sit there and feel guilty about it, whilst trying to pretend that everything was normal.

INTERVIEWER

Did you ever think of going back home after you left?

ALICE

Yeah I did, when things got really rough, but I don't think I ever really could have gone back. (Pause and looks sad) but you know, I found the café and I'm even at college now. (Smiles)

INTERVIEWER

What are you doing at college?

ALICE

A cookery course. (Laughs) Working here has really inspired me.

INTERVIEWER

Well its been lovely to talk to you, and I wish you all the best, and I'm sure you'll hear from us soon.

They shake hands as the INTERVIWER gets up to leave. ALICE clears away the breakfast things before waking up to the counter and smiles at a BOY sitting there.

CREDITS: TRAIN JOURNEY

The words are embossed on the background before 'Train' disappears and underneath 'journey' the definition 'Travel or passage from one place to another, especially one covering a large distance or taking a long time.' [1913 Webster] appear, to a continual roll of the cast list.
     

Script drafts

Alternative poster idea

Apart from my inital idea for a poster based on her 'train journey' I also toyed with the idea of creating a poster based on the station.

Poster designs

After I had my ideas in place I used one of my production shots for the basis for a first draft of my film poster.

First of all I had to eliminate the date stamp that was unfortunaely let on my image. Then I lightened the top background, window and added a white block at the bottom, to use for my billing block. Then I added my anchorage before emphasising the reflection by cutting out my figure and using a lower definition eraser to add a lucidity to create a reflection effect. However the problem I faced was that Icouldn't flip the image without flipping the whole background so I couldn't make the reflection look realistic, which I something I has to take into consideration when taking my next set of production shots or using this idea again. Afterwhich I got feedback from my teacher giving me hints on how to improve my idea and general poster properties. Some of the problems I had with my poster was that my proportion was all wrong for the size it would be on a standard A3 film poster format. In addition to this I would need to work on a way to get a better reflection image for my idea.

Then I began working on my second draft with a different set of production shots.

First off I chose a photo with a really high visibility reflection, so as not to encounter the same problems as last time. However as I didn't like the main image and decided to replace it with the photo I used from my first draft, by layering it on top of my new photo. Moreover to improve continuty of the too images I darkened the background and blurred the edges by using a low definition 'clone stamp' tool. Then I created a replica age certification and alligned my billing block with the copntours of the window and space underneath. After I also added more ancorage, and based on the opinion of my teacher moved the text in relation to the design layout and added a higher contrast of white to the text to make it stand out on the dark background. The final product of my second draft was a lot diffferent to the first, as the dark contrast appeared to give the film an element of gritty realism, whereas my first draft appeared a lot more romantiscised and dream like. However it produced a result I was happy with, as I did offer a more realistic portayal of a runaway.

Poster Idea

Here's some found images that I used to explore poster ideas.

Poster ideas

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Poster Designs

After deconstructing some poster ideas I used the social network 'Facebook' in order to get feedback from a variety of different social representations of my target market. To do so I put my photo ideas on facebook and asked people to comment on the ones they liked.

• Daniel Rimes: the picture here is kl because it creates layers within the imagery giving it texture! The name of the film however is a little small in font
  
• Erin Power: I find this to be slightly pretentious and uninteresting. I agree with Daniel about the layering though.
• Michelle Rimes: I dislike this poster.

  I like the idea of the silhouette but it has an unnessasary number of faces on it which I feel detracts from the artistic feel of the poster.
  The colour scheme works well, it's bold and stands out.
  Whilst the text may be... slightly small the contrast between the black and White makes up for it's size making it stand out on the page!
• Zachary Oscar Bergman i think its gd lol

• Daniel Rimes this is not so interesting as home of the brave as it just apears messy with font on the top bottom and in the middle! picture is interesting and sets a scene but personally isn't interesting to me!
• Erin Power There's too much text, too much to take in. You need to be able to understand the information in a shot, not after a long hard read.
• Michelle Rimes

  The shot used for this is brilliant, it has relevance to the title and tells a story of it's own.
  Whilst there is quite alot of text on the page I think it is placed well, the important information is a good size and stands out enough where ...as the less important information is less obvious on the page and blends in rather than standing out.
• Damian O'Sullivan cut down the quotes and ur golden

• Daniel Rimes once again i enjoy the layering of this cover! and the splitting of the image into two pictures! the white text however is appropriate in places but at the middle left aligned text does clash with the background!
• Erin Power I've always thought there's too much text on this, just isn't attention grabbing. I like the close up of the face and the scene below it, very interesting.
• Michelle Rimes
  I don't think there is too much text on this poster but I think that it is badly placed. The important information doesn't stand o...ut anymore from the the less important information.Colour scheme used is bold and stands out well though. Also because of the colours and where the font is placed it's very difficult to read!
  I like the two images used in this. They both have relevance and are intresting enough to grab your attention.

After which I used the same technique to start making mock up posters with found images off google search engine, then got people to vote on which one they liked better.

• Erin Power B.
• Michelle Rimes B
• Steven Letts B
• Ali-John Ramsey Mirsepassi B
• Theo McCarthy Budzynski i personally like C
• Daniel Rimes C

Then did the same for: Font, Production title, Tag line and Certification.

• Erin Power The 3rd one. Not too fancy, not too casual.
• Michelle Rimes ‎3 - it's had a creative flare rather than just being a basic font.
• Ali-John Ramsey Mirsepassi ‎1, especially if it is in large font
• Daniel Rimes yes number 1

• Erin Power Example five
• Char 'Soprano' Bierman ‎3
• Michelle Rimes Example 2
• Daniel Rimes ‎3

  
  

• Erin Power ‎12a. 15 if it's particularly graphic.
• Damian O'Sullivan ‎12 a. 15 if theres frequent swearing or graphic scenes
• Michelle Rimes ‎15 if scenes including alcohol and dysfunctional familys are actually shown.
  12a if they are mostly just reffered to.
• Daniel Rimes ‎12a!

Erin Power Fish Tank Titles.
But.. if I may suggest... 'Fish Tank Productions'?

Michelle Rimes Fish tank titles.
(fish tank productions also works)

Daniel Rimes life line!

After everything I then decided to design a train based poster using the 'Fish Tank Title' production company and a Baskerville old face font. As well as the tag line: 'Where would you go to leave everything behind you?' and to use an age certificate of 12A for my poster designs.

Film Posters

Here's a powerpoint presentation I made on poster deconstrucion: